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Think of a place you would rather be?

I would rather be in a place very far from here. The weather is much nicer and the view is also very beautiful. The view includes mountains in the distance that are snow-capped like wonderful frosted cupcakes. The sun shines brightly onto the glossy reddish concrete. There is a canopy in the center of this place a city skyline around the entire structure. I have been to this place several times in my life each time better than the last. There is a kind of smoky smell everywhere you go because the medical society there is very liberal about treatment of illnesses. You can hear football games in the distance with cheering of fans as athletes perform at a very high level. When I am at this place I feel like I am in a world of my own. There is no sadness, fear, or worry in this place. Only meditation, focus, and fun. I would make sure to bring my skateboard if I go to this place with some skate shoes.

Senses:
Sight- Buildings, mountains, open spaces, red concrete, a canopy, sunshine, blue skies, grass, trees.
Hear- Football fans, wheels of skateboards, trucks grinding, people talking.
Taste- Fresh crisp mountain air, energy drinks, blood if you fall really hard haha.
Smell- The air smells more crisp, some of the skaters smoke medical marijuana which can be pretty smelly, other than that there is not too much else to smell.
Touch- Smooth concrete, jagged angles of metal for grinding, rough grip tape, all walks of life, reflective building windows, cool breeze, benches, a weird little sculpture made of metal.

Corrected description:

Ive been to this place several times each time better than the last. This place is far away from home. In the distance I see mountains and the air smells clean and crisp. On the other side I see endless buildings and open space with a cool breeze washing over me. I see a mass of smooth red concrete with curves and sharp angles with a canopy in the center. I can hear skateboarders grinding and wheels flying around me. I feel rough grip tape and taste energy drinks as I spend time here. I hear friends talking and laughing. I see a glare from the buildings reflecting the sunlight and blue skies. I can also hear fans screaming at a distant football game with the scent of medical marijuana being smoked by sick people. This place represents freedom in its' purest form.